Feed my ego or cut me down a few notches

Stachio · #1 07-27-2004, 03:45 PM

Here's little metal I put together. I'm not exactly a prodigy, so I will say that it took me a couple of months to write this, program drums, attempt to lay down consistant guitar work, and slop through some bass.
I could give more excuses, but frankly, I don't think it's that bad. A few minor mishaps happened on the first song which made the bass slightly off synch.

Here it is...

Oh right...and the constructive criticism thing is good.

superbassman2000 · #2 07-27-2004, 04:44 PM

i like "dim eyes of dmitri" best. it actually sounds pretty professional, like i could see it on headbanger's ball or something.

yeah, after i went to a soil concert and they had a few opening acts that sounded like that. i have a newfound respect (especially for the drummers!)

other song was ok

Charlie

Brendan · #3 07-27-2004, 04:56 PM

The only real problem is that is kind of meanders. This, however, I attribute soley to the lack of vocals. If you had vocals to anchor the whole ship, you'd have a great song there.

And if you make the 2nd movement Opeth weenie metal, I hunt you down and remove your metal badge and revoek your club membership.

**Adam Barkley** · #4 07-27-2004, 05:08 PM

Pretty Cool, just don't add any crappy "grunt/scream" vocals. That would ruin it in my opinion.

Brendan · #5 07-27-2004, 05:14 PM

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Originally Posted by abark000

Pretty Cool, just don't add any crappy "grunt/scream" vocals. That would ruin it in my opinion.

You are aware he made a metal song, correct?

**Josh Ryan** · #6 07-27-2004, 05:32 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

The only real problem is that is kind of meanders. This, however, I attribute soley to the lack of vocals. If you had vocals to anchor the whole ship, you'd have a great song there.

And if you make the 2nd movement Opeth weenie metal, I hunt you down and remove your metal badge and revoek your club membership.

Oh man! Just when you and I were on the road to recover you go and call Opeth "weenie metal". I can no longer recognize you as a man.

Stachio, first song kicks serious ass! I don't think the bass is too loud, but then again I like bass loud. Vocals would be cool , growling or not.

The second song is damn cool as well. I like the choppy start, the bass may actually be a tad loud, but not much. (listening to it all through Sennheiser hd 280 pros). If you changed the tone to gain more meat you could turn the volume down and retain clarity IMO. I thought of evil Chuck a few times during this track, which is a good thing. Good work!

Stachio · #7 07-27-2004, 05:35 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

The only real problem is that is kind of meanders. This, however, I attribute soley to the lack of vocals. If you had vocals to anchor the whole ship, you'd have a great song there.

And if you make the 2nd movement Opeth weenie metal, I hunt you down and remove your metal badge and revoek your club membership.

I try to avoid the meandering by avoiding the typical song structure and straying from repeating myself too much, but I guess that is hard to do while keeping vocals in mind. Any particular moments which were too repetitive?

I also think that if I actually find willing musicians in my area *sigh*, I could get some different and less repetitive riffs and overall feel.

The 2nd movement is going to be straight weenie metal! Have you been reading my diary?

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Originally Posted by abark000

Pretty Cool, just don't add any crappy "grunt/scream" vocals. That would ruin it in my opinion.

Are there other type of vocals

?
And actually, if anybody wishes to add lyrics to them, please do.

Thanks for the comments guys.

Stachio · #8 07-27-2004, 05:39 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

Oh man! Just when you and I were on the road to recover you go and call Opeth "weenie metal". I can no longer recognize you as a man.

Stachio, first song kicks serious ass! I don't think the bass is too loud, but then again I like bass loud. Vocals would be cool , growling or not.

The second song is damn cool as well. I like the choppy start, the bass may actually be a tad loud, but not much. (listening to it all through Sennheiser hd 280 pros). If you changed the tone to gain more meat you could turn the volume down and retain clarity IMO. I thought of evil Chuck a few times during this track, which is a good thing. Good work!

Thanks Bliss. Having heard your stuff that means a lot. The second song was recorded in a way which added a bit more trebble (mic'ed bass amp through guitar amp to get enough gain). Good advice though.
I may be chastised, but who's evil Chuck?

Also....cough...I also like Opeth.

Brendan · #9 07-27-2004, 05:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Stachio

I
And actually, if anybody wishes to add lyrics to them, please do.

Thanks for the comments guys.

I can add hella lyrics for you. Ask Ben Strange, or any numer of unfortunate crazies I've show my lyrics to. You might be one of them, come to think of it.

If not, rest assured, I can write hella lyrics for you.

Brendan · #10 07-27-2004, 05:45 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

Oh man! Just when you and I were on the road to recover you go and call Opeth "weenie metal". I can no longer recognize you as a man.

Oh Man! Just when you and I were on the road to recover, you go and like Opeth. I can no longer recognize you as a man.

**Josh Ryan** · #11 07-27-2004, 05:56 PM

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Originally Posted by Stachio

Thanks Bliss. Having heard your stuff that means a lot. The second song was recorded in a way which added a bit more trebble (mic'ed bass amp through guitar amp to get enough gain). Good advice though.
I may be chastised, but who's evil Chuck?

Also....cough...I also like Opeth.

Evil Chuck was the founder/writer for one of my favorite bands ever, Death.

**Josh Ryan** · #12 07-27-2004, 05:57 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

Oh Man! Just when you and I were on the road to recover, you go and like Opeth. I can no longer recognize you as a man.

HELLO! there was a smilie after my post. Take it easy sister.

Brendan · #13 07-27-2004, 05:59 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

HELLO! there was a smilie after my post. Take it easy sister.

I was aware you were making a joke.
I was making one as well.

**Josh Ryan** · #14 07-27-2004, 06:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

I was aware you were making a joke.
I was making one as well.

OK good, I get confused without smilies to guide me.

Stachio · #15 07-27-2004, 06:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

Evil Chuck was the founder/writer for one of my favorite bands ever, Death.

Ah...Chuck Schuldiner. I love Death (that sentence shouldn't be quoted out of context). I'd say they were a big influence on me. During the part of the writing process for the second song I went into a heavy Death phase.

Brendan - Bring on the lyrics, bring on the funk. I'd love to hear what you can muster.

Brendan · #16 07-27-2004, 06:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

OK good, I get confused without smilies to guide me.

It's my burden.

Brendan · #17 07-27-2004, 06:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Stachio

Brendan - Bring on the lyrics, bring on the funk. I'd love to hear what you can muster.

Have you seen what I do, or are you a virgin?

**Josh Ryan** · #18 07-27-2004, 06:07 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

Have you seen what I do, or are you a virgin?

I'd like to see what you do! I think....

Brendan · #19 07-27-2004, 06:09 PM

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Originally Posted by Blisshead

I'd like to see what you do! I think....

post your lyrics

3rd and 4th posts.

You've been warned.

**Adam Barkley** · #20 07-27-2004, 06:12 PM

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Originally Posted by Brendan

You are aware he made a metal song, correct?

I am not a huge metal head, but I can think of some examples of metal bands with "singers" who sing in their real voice and don't just grunt an octave below what their normal voice is.