First listen through...
I really like your part, it really adds to the song. I frankly can't stand the strumming pattern used. The bridge does have some intonation (~2:00). I don't think the guitar solo there fits either... or it might just need some tightening up. I don't like how the outro concludes; seems abrupt. The chorus (~1:30) sounds clunky and I don't know what else to say about it.
I love your melody, it makes the song.
My suggestion, which coincides with bassteban, is add some interest points with dyanmics? I think another thing that was bothering me was the variance between your legato playing vs. the staccatto parts the guitar was playing sometimes. If it's a chill song you wanted, less the attack on the notes, eg. play more smoothly and vice versa.
did I mention I liked your bassline?
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Originally Posted by Sindri907
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