Just a few of my home-made songs. Opinions/Criticism greatly appreciated
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Hi guys, I never posted around here, mostly because I couldn't find the means to record my own songs, but I recently happened upon a Tascam DP-008 that my friend let me borrow in exchange for me lending him my bass amp. So anyways, here are the not-so-perfect results of me toying around with it for a few weeks. Tempo issues and mistakes are mostly untouched due to my unfimiliarity with the DP-008, but hopefully the songs are at least listenable, an hey, maybe enjoyable? Well, here you guys go. NOTE: There are no vocals, because my voice kills small children http://soundcloud.com/vilna4/ozzy-esque http://soundcloud.com/vilna4/arab-punk/s-LcRjn http://soundcloud.com/vilna4/groovy-metal-2 http://soundcloud.com/vilna4/for-the-stoners
P.S These are working titles! I wouldn't actually call a song "ozzy-esque"
Last edited by PlaytheRoot : 09-11-2011 at 09:36 PM.
Ozzy-esque: the riff at 0:38 would be better off without its second half; it's a little too easy-going, especially compared to the eerier part of the song afterwards. This song drags out a bit but maybe it's because there are no vocals (do you want to add guest vocals or are you just doing instrumentals?)
Arab punk: Nice, good stuff. I think you could do more with the intro. Check out Miasma and the Carousel of Headless Horses for more cool scale ideas. The stoner metal part is pretty sweet, but the progression between your different riffs feels a little artificial sometimes (maybe those are just recording issues though). The speed of some of tom rolls on this track is excessive sometimes, I would have gone with 16th instead of 32nds or whatever. There's also something a little obnoxious about the 2:07 guitar melody.
Groovy metal: Eh, maybe it's just not my style, but I feel like this sounds more like the music you'd get from a show like Destroyed in Seconds than a good metal piece, at least before about 1:50. Gets better towards the end, but it didn't particularly touch me.
All around very solid work, but in my opinion each track has its weaknesses. Keep it up!
@Melting, if you're interested I posted up another one. And hey, if you wanna throw some vocals down I'd be very pleased. These songs were not written as instrumentals http://soundcloud.com/vilna4/for-the-stoners
Me? On vocals? I think "throw up" is more appropriate...
I listened, and I think it's interesting, I like that you didn't only stay within the realm of doom. You could take some rhythmic cues from Dark Castle to avoid the KH-H-H-H-SH-H-H-H or drum patterns in your stoner/doom section though. I suppose that solo in the part that sounds like was a sort of placeholder? Anyway, it sounds like a cool cross between Sad Wings of Destiny-era Judas Priest and thrash. Again, maybe more creative drumming would be cool here. Of course, if that's not within your ability I don't blame you. I didn't realize you were playing everything, so hats off to you. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8dgUkIVDtl4
