just me fooling around...need constructive criticism

[Stingray89]

i was just fooling around and i didn't know my friend was recording me. i rarely use a pick but feel free to tell me what you think.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JF7D-hvV2Go

[WayneS]

Eh!

[hover]

Little choppy (needs to flow), a little messy with the fingering, but not too shabby at all, I liked it...your own creation?

Oh, and you just happenned to have yer cool guy shades on and pullin a Steve Harris while unbeknownst to you were being filmed...hmmm.

[Stingray89]

yes it's my own creation i know its choppy but i made it up in a couple of minutes and then our drummer suggested using a pick to see what it sounded like thats when he recorded it it flow alot better when i use my fingers

[hover]

Gotcha. I'd love to hear it with fingers. You should expand on the idea...pretty good man.

I used to be about 90% pick, but now I'm 50-50, just so much more dexterity with fingers now...to think it only took 20 years...hahaha.

I'd call it inevitable from a move away from modulation effects and that "bright clicky" tone I used to prefer...

[Stingray89]

I'll try to record another version tomorrow at practice using my fingers and will try to post it sometime. Thanks for your feedback my friend.

[Lichtaffen]

Your rhythm in general is a bit shoddy. I bet it's because you're not used to playing with a pick. If you had a steady rhythm going I think it would sound much much better than it does here. I don't see your foot tapping. The best melodic idea is nothing without a solid rhythmic form. Sorry, being honest.

[artistanbul]

^I agree
Do use metronome or a drum loop next time. timing&rhythm comes first.