OK. Ill bite.
Nice production. Good mix. I Like your singers "Lita ford unpolished" vocal sound. Lyrics are fair.
The intro is too long and unneeded......ESP since this is your only example of music on your site. I forced myself to sit through it....not good. Delete it alltogether. Its good live intro music if this is your first song of your set....or a song that's going to be buried deep in the album, but otherwise its just unnecessary.
Your first main riff is a bit reminiscent of "Perry mason" by ozzy. That's OK though, just pointing it out. Maybe swap the second riff with that one and open the song with that...then into the Perry mason riff?
Dropping the song back down for the verse is cool......but the transition back to the 2nd verse (and all other verses for that matter) is choppy and sounds like it was cut and pasted in there on pro tools. There's no need for this as the last bar of the chorus would stream perfectly into the first bars of the verse. Stop the stop. Its NOT good. Just let it flow.
If you're going to go back to the slow part for the solo (I wouldn't. That's just me) ... let the keyboardist do his thing first, but only the first part.....then have the heavy riff come back and the guitar solo goes over that.....ending with the keys and lead harmonizing the current " one and a two and a" keyboard solo ending...... again without the cut and paste stop into the last verse.
Jmho. I'm OK at arranging things.
as it is now I'd do three outta 5 stars.....but I think some attention to the overall flow (with my suggestions or other solutions) would benifit the feel significantly and make it a 4 star affair.
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