This is a link to my myspace music player. The metal song is called
"End Time". I was in a hurry to get it on the page so it may be sloppy at some parts. It has guitar by my friend and bass by me.
there are some good ideas in the metal song. It's a good place to start out.
I would suggest more practice with a metronome. the drums are pretty shaky in parts, as is the guitar. the bass is better than the other two instruments.
your use of effects is good except I've never liked reverb on the bass.
Thanks for the feedback! It would probably help for me to get a better recording system that doesn't delay too. I'll tell my guitarist and "drummer" what you said.