My attempt at a Mainstream-ish and peaceful song. Feedback appreciated!

djt820 · #1 03-19-2010, 05:38 PM

Here's the link
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/305140
Its simple but it took me a while to completely structure it. I love playing it and this is from a guy who listens to Avant Garde and metal and the such. Lemme know whatcha think!

djt820 · #2 03-21-2010, 02:12 PM

Aw cmon guys. 40 views and not a single reply? I think Im gonna cry.
... :P

SonicDevice · #3 03-21-2010, 07:13 PM

Hey don't cry! lol

My first impression was that on the "intro" the guitars seemed to be working against each other at times...the transition into the song didn't really feel smooth or cohesive.

When the drums and bass kicked in it felt really nice...could definitely use some vocals...but I can see some potential there.

I had the same issues on the outro as with the intro...it almost felt like another song or something.

All in all I'd say it's a good job though and keep at it!

Drop-the-One · #4 03-21-2010, 10:11 PM

If your goal were to get it on the radio (w vox)... you would have a lot of work to do

I liked the real reverbed guitar in the intro.
If you get some vox in their too...
Liked when the drums came in and when the bass doubled the guitar in the middle

Elrend · #5 03-21-2010, 10:15 PM

You're using way to large chords to make it sound peaceful.

djt820 · #6 03-22-2010, 04:44 AM

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Originally Posted by Elrend

You're using way to large chords to make it sound peaceful.

I wasn't aware chords had sizes. Are some of them big-boned?
Everyone: Thanks for letting me know what you thought. Keep them coming!

santucci218 · #7 03-22-2010, 04:51 AM

Yes, the intro feels like the end of another song and then that silence is like, a cd going to the next track. maybe change something up with that? Honestly, the song is long enough that you can go without that whole beginning part.

The panning for the guitars is kinda goofy... Like, you will hear the guitar in both speakers then as the chord is held, you can only hear it from one speaker. Not a very balanced feel.

Tighten up the screws, but you have a nice outlay for what you want. Don't deem it finished just yet. make it the best you can!

djt820 · #8 03-22-2010, 04:57 AM

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Originally Posted by santucci218

Yes, the intro feels like the end of another song and then that silence is like, a cd going to the next track. maybe change something up with that? Honestly, the song is long enough that you can go without that whole beginning part.

The panning for the guitars is kinda goofy... Like, you will hear the guitar in both speakers then as the chord is held, you can only hear it from one speaker. Not a very balanced feel.

Tighten up the screws, but you have a nice outlay for what you want. Don't deem it finished just yet. make it the best you can!

People really seem to hate the intro and outro XD
I plan on rerecording this for my album and tighting everything up. Thanks for the review.

santucci218 · #9 03-22-2010, 05:11 AM

Welcome sir. Ive grown very fond of this section of the forum. I like getting advice, and giving it. So feel free to find my thread with my music and poke fun at it, haha.

ColinGWood · #10 03-22-2010, 05:18 AM

Yea, definitely drop the intro... what?