| first - the timing: you're not together with the drums. or with yourself. the different lines sound very disjointed, they don't form a tight unit.
second - the material itself: there's no real "idea" that the listener can identify. i mean of course there's a progression and some development, but there's no *real* motif/idea or at least it's not presented clearly. it sounds like you're just soloing.
ok. i hope you're not disappointed about your first feedback, but this is what i hear. i feel that music should make a statement.
but i know that it can be difficult to present a musical idea in a
"to the point" fashion. to me, your track sounded like it was just "first-takes". ie recorded something and than just left it at that.
if you want to make a real statement, etc. maybe spend some more time working things out and perfecting them. even if you want some improvisation, get a backing track happening that works with the drums. | 
