Critique request?

[Basschi]

Hope it's OK to post a critique request here. I'd love to hear constructive criticism for my technique, intonation, and timing on this video:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I2QpaDsCEME

I know it's a bit cliché to play Donna Lee on the fretless bass. But I think this piece is a really good way to make progress, and that's what I'm trying to do with the help of the metronome.

Anyway, thanks in advance for any responses...

[camiloochoa]

a couple of things that i noticed:

1. you have to check the rythm, because it´s not very clear on some of the phrases, maybe try to play it at a lower speed, focusing on that (rythm, value of the notes & rests).

2. you have to check your swing eights.