Any Improvement?

[Makoa Johnson]

Hey fellow bassists,

A while back I posted a couple links and asked for some constructive criticism. I got a bunch of helpful and encouraging responses, and I want to thank you all again for those.

Anyway since then I've obviously kept practicing and performing a lot. And, as suggested, also started some formal training. (though I would probably still consider myself mostly self taught)
Anyway, I just posted a new cover video and was hoping that some of you could take the time to check it out and give me some quick reviews of the good, bad, and ugly of it!
YouTube - Adele - Don't You Remember (Bass Cover)
As before, anything you can say, whether it be personal preference or instructional fact will obviously help me a lot.

Thank you so much,
MJ

[turbo chicken]

your joking right... i just watched the video.

the music speaks for itself...

[Makoa Johnson]

Originally Posted by turbo chicken

your joking right... i just watched the video.

the music speaks for itself...

Actually I wasn't joking. But thanks, I guess...
Hopefully the music spoke for itself in a good way.

MJ

[turbo chicken]

well i subscribed if that say's anything.

[Makoa Johnson]

Haha, Thank you!

MJ

[j-raj]

I think that this is in the wrong forum of TB.
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[mambo4]

I have no idea how it compares to the recording you learned it from, so this point may be more relevant to the guy who originally played it:

1.) well done, sounds great.
2.) my nit pick is that - in only a few spots - there is some busy lines that fight with also busy vocal phrasing, just a few sprinkles of "chops" where a half or whole note might serve the vocals better. But only in a few spots. Nothign Jamerson hasn't also done

[OnlyJerry]

I think it sounded great. May I ask for how long you've been playing?

[Makoa Johnson]

@mambo4:
I learned it by ear from listening to the original video, and then changed a few parts to better suit my personal style.
In terms of point number one, thank you! In terms of point number two, big thanks for that insight, I will definitely try to be more conscious of that in the future.

@OnlyJerry
Thanks, I've been playing bass for almost 5 years now.

[Volk99]

Wow, very nice. Your time is about as close to perfect as you can get, played cleanly the whole way through, nice sounding lines, like your tone. Well done.