Hey guys, looking for opinions!

[Tehdouglas]

So the other day I decided I wanted to record something to put up on myspace just for kicks, though I just have a crappy headset mic. Alot of the practice I do revolves around improvisation, so I decuded to just jam for 10 minutes and cut about 4 minutes out because I didn't like it (you can sort of hear where I cut it too but its not too bad). I also played around with a few effects in audacity just for kicks

So I was hoping I could get a few people to give me some insight on it. I've been playing since Jan this year (started to get more serious around march). Your opinions are greatly appreciated! Thanks.

Link: http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm...endid=46430639

[bubinga5]

Sorry Tehdouglas cant see myspace on my work PC. But im sure other TBers WOULD like to give ther opinion on your inspired music. Come on people this guy need TB's valued opinion!!!

(i hate to see knowone answered)

[Correlli]

I played the tune a couple of times. One suggestion I would like to make is work on your phrasing. Phrases can be 4, 8, or 12 bars in lenght. Each phrase progresses through a series of chord changes, and ends with a some sort of cadance.

[Tehdouglas]

Thanks for the tip, I too felt that way after recording and I'll have to focus on it more when I improvise.