So, here's the deal - Image-Line (the makers of Fruity Loops or 'FL Studio,' as the program's now known as) teamed up with a trance singer/artist named Veela, and are running a contest where us Image-Line users remix one of her songs in any way we like, so long as we use her vocals and at least one of a few specific programs that they produce. They will pick their favorites after June 5th.
Here is the company's official statement about the contest, and
here is her original version of the song.
I've decided to enter. The competition is very stiff, there's some really good home producers out there. That link above only shows a very, very small handful of the entries, and many more are better then the ones in that post, as shown in posts only visible by forum members. I don't really think I have too great of a chance at winning, but, it's a ton of fun, a great learning experience, and I think I came up with something pretty decent.
So, what I'm hoping from the TBers is some critiquing. Of
any sort. I've worked too long in my crappy home studio that I may have lost track of the song or what sounds good outside my little room, and there's certain limitations that both my studio and my own perspective have that I'm probably overlooking.
If you could, please, please, please give me some constructive criticism.
You don't need to be musically educated or into production! I value the opinions of all musicians and music lovers.
So, please, if you don't like it, just tell me why if you can. If you think it's too "clangy," the singer sounds pretentious or too whatever, or if the cadence in Bar 17 doesn't relate well to the supertonic in Bar 18, please let me know. They're all valid opinions.
Here's my entry:
Josh W. Myers on ReverbNation - It's the "Night Visions feat. Veela" song. If you're a Reverb Nation member, you can download it for free, or just PM me and I can email you that (or any other) song.
I've noticed a couple of things that I don't like so far that I'll be changing soon and updating on this file. However, for this one as it stands now, I've noticed one of the "you hear her whimper" lines is too quiet, and the fake harmony in the 1st verse (using one of the programs they require) doesn't sound very good to me and I'll rework that a bit.
Beyond that, I'd really love to hear your thoughts. Please be honest, don't pull punches, and tell me what you really think of it. Seriously. Many thanks in advance!
