a poem of mine

Discussion in 'Off Topic [BG]' started by evilbob101, Feb 7, 2003.

  1. Well i figured since there are some poems and poem-esque things going on right now...i might as well join in on the fun....wrote this a few nights ago.....

    Everything running, galloping through my coma attractions

    Discreet implications, final notifications of the results of my actions

    A minor threat moves onward, traversing danger

    Never leaving the boundries until I hear your cry

    Things left out, things left in

    Deceit, destruction, it's all the same in the endj

    Can I burn your mind a little longer?

    Pure crystals drop from cheeck to my soul

    I'm the one whose done this, yet, you will never know

    Come a little closer, whisper in my ear

    Come a little closer pretend you didn't hear

    And maybe you never will

    And maybe you never will

    Come a little closer, put danger in my mind

    And thats about it.....not sure if i want to add to it or not...anyhow------input...comments....2cents.....questions....thanks!
  2. PollyBass

    PollyBass ******

    Jun 25, 2001
    Shreveport, LA
    Yes, it's great, now don't ever do that again.
  3. lol...ok, thanks. ill keep that in mind.:rolleyes: :D :D
  4. Metalifan89


    Jan 24, 2003
    My House
    Dude... You almost brought tears to my Eyes (Key Word Here : Almost)
  5. Well. almost is better than nothing I suppose. Thank you!
  6. needs a funky bass line... :bassist: but then again, everything does! :D
  7. :cool: actually....i got to thinking it might sound very interesting with a funk thing going on.....and....well...it did, to say the least. I think i will make something more slow and melodic though....mmmmm i can still taste the funk...