A Song I Wrote

Discussion in 'Off Topic [BG]' started by moptoptony, Dec 6, 2003.

  1. It's called Katie's Song...it's got a Ben Folds-esque vocal line to it, but obviously, all I can present are the lyrics. So here it is. Tell me what you think.

    Katie's Song

    Sitting alone.
    On a cold and heartfelt night.
    Not seeing you ain’t right.
    And I’m sitting alone.

    Writing a song.
    Not sure what I’m gonna say.
    Why’s she make me feel this way?
    She helps me write this song.

    Looking at her
    And knowing the fact
    That’s she’s loving an *******
    Hurts me.
    I wish, God, I wish
    That she’d give me a chance.

    Lying down
    In my cold and lonely bed.
    I wish you were here
    Consoling me, lying alone.

    I compliment her
    On the way that she looks
    The way her hair smells
    The way that she walks
    Down the hall just to hug me
    And smile at me.
    Oh, if only she knew
    How I feel for her.

    After the show
    She’s talking on her mobile phone
    I ask her for it,
    She complies,
    My soul melts to her eyes.

    And despite all the fortune
    That’s come down my way
    She’s on my mind always
    And won’t go away
    She’s my beautiful tumor
    That seems as benign
    To everyone else
    But winds up to kill
  2. Nick Gann

    Nick Gann Talkbass' Tubist in Residence

    Mar 24, 2002
    Silver Spring, MD
    "*******" kills it. Think of a better, maybe more subtle, way of saying the guy isn't good.

    And calling her a tumor isn't that hot either.
  3. Gia


    Feb 28, 2001
    sucky suckerson
  4. Joe Turski

    Joe Turski

    Jul 29, 2003
    Not bad, but the monkey thinks differently [​IMG]
  5. I love the ******* part. Its hilarious. Good twist.
  6. Aaron


    Jun 2, 2001
    Bellingham, WA
    Picture of an *******: