[Feedback Requested] Did I overplay?

Discussion in 'Recordings [BG]' started by Kyuuga, Jun 17, 2019.

  1. Kyuuga


    Jan 5, 2018
    Sooooo, Talkbass, I need your opinion...

    My band just recently released a new song and although I think my tone is decent I've been second-guessing my playing. Did I overplay in this song?

    My bassline is quite busy but I figured I'd add a little spice to the song and I ended up having a lot of fun with it. With that being said I'm not sure if it's too over the top or not.

    Would like your opinion on this one, just out of curiosity...

    Here's the song itself:

  2. DWBass

    DWBass The Funkfather

    Take it with a grain of salt........my personal taste says too busy but that's just me.
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  3. charlie monroe

    charlie monroe Gold Supporting Member

    Feb 14, 2011
    Buffalo, NY
    I would have left the singer more room - seems like you are crowding him.
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  4. Tnavis


    Feb 25, 2003
    Minneapolis, MN
    I think everything is totally within reason for the song; the only critique I would add is that while I like the bits where it's just vocals and bass, i'll go with what charlie monroe said; that is the part that seems busy. Then again, that just could be because that's the expectation we're used to hearing. It's original music, which means really it's your rules.
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  5. "Did I overplay?" No.

    Not really my style of music, but I liked your bassline. Both where it sat in the mix and the tone you had going.
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  6. /\/\3phist0

    /\/\3phist0 ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) mmm Woody! DHDIK? Sweet Treets. Supporting Member

    Reminiscent of early oingo boingo I dig!
  7. Kyuuga


    Jan 5, 2018
    You know, I never really had thought of it that way...it's our song, it's original, before my bassline there was nothing so I can really do whatever I want with it.

    What matters is if people liked it or not and I've been getting some good feedback. I certainly did have a lot of fun recording it and have a lot of fun playing it so I guess that's good?
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  8. I think it's good; The lines sit nicely. I think generally matching the rhythm of the vocals helps it to blend in, and it provides some counter melody. I may have done it differently, but if everyone made the same musical choices, music would be pretty boring.
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  9. Bassi5t


    Jul 18, 2017
    San Diego
    I dig what you do with the singer. Kinda like your dancing with the vox... my opinion is that the guitar staccato and the bass staccato are a bit much together. If it were me, I would try some legato stuff with the guitar but that’s just my style. Over all I dig it and would go see your band.
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  10. Kyuuga


    Jan 5, 2018
    You're right, everyone has their own "thing"...I guess sometimes you just need to layoff the "Talkbass rules" of play to the song and keep it simple and just let loose!

    Thanks a lot man. I see what you're saying, the staccato in the chorus...it's basically a riff, we're just playing it together. But maybe I should have changed it up a bit, good feedback!
  11. charlie monroe

    charlie monroe Gold Supporting Member

    Feb 14, 2011
    Buffalo, NY
    What did the rest of your crew tell you?
  12. Oddly


    Jan 17, 2014
    Dublin, Ireland.
    Not a fan of that guitar sound, but your bass and the vocals sound great together.
    Nice work!
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  13. Kyuuga


    Jan 5, 2018
    If you mean my band members they dig it, I guess...we never really talked about it, the song was created mostly through jamming and everyone just lays their parts down. If no one says anything it mostly means we like it. We usually talk about the song as a whole, not really specific parts.

    As for the studio engineer...I don't know, he didn't say anything, he just recorded it. :roflmao:
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  14. GrapeBass


    Jun 10, 2004
    Graphic Designer: Yorkville Sound
    IMHO, just a bit too busy BUT you could make it work by doubling the vocal rhythmic pattern (if not the melody) during those breaks. When it's the full band, the eighth notes work well.

    All in all, Good work!

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  15. OptimalOptimus


    Jan 4, 2019
    Well you do what you want to, there is no rules since it is your own stuff.

    As for my personal opinion on the song, while it is fun I think the bass is either too busy ( the fills when you have only the drums and the singer with you ) or the tone is way too dark and should be more nasal so it would cut.

    A Pbass style of tone don't work in every situation.
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  16. 16notes


    Dec 18, 2005
    My 2 cents is that it’s less about playing too much and more about playing in the wrong places during the verses. As others have stated the bass there swims all over the vocal - would have grooved better if you played the spaces during the verses like the guitarist did - maybe playing where/what you did one time on the last verse to grab the listeners ear and give the bass a “hi mom” moment.

    When you settle down in the choruses the band tightens up and the arrangement/production sounds more pro. Starting simple and varying the verses can really help build a track and draw a listener in.

    I like what you play on the chorus and solo sections!

    Keep recording, listening deeply and getting feedback it’s a journey!
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  17. The fact that you're asking makes me think that you would do it differently if you had the chance. Id really have to hear an alt take to tell you.

    Its got a great 80s vibe to it. Its recorded, its good, it is what it is. Don't beat yourself up over it.
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  18. nilorius

    nilorius Inactive

    Oct 27, 2016
    Riga - Latvia
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  19. RichardW


    Feb 25, 2016
    near Philly
    C'mon. It's called Psycho Disco Party. It needs a busy bass line.
  20. nonohmic


    Dec 13, 2005
    ABQ, NM.
    Killin son!
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