[Feedback Requested] Did I overplay?

Take it with a grain of salt........my personal taste says too busy but that's just me.

 

I would have left the singer more room - seems like you are crowding him.

 

I think everything is totally within reason for the song; the only critique I would add is that while I like the bits where it's just vocals and bass, i'll go with what charlie monroe said; that is the part that seems busy. Then again, that just could be because that's the expectation we're used to hearing. It's original music, which means really it's your rules.

 

"Did I overplay?" No.


Not really my style of music, but I liked your bassline. Both where it sat in the mix and the tone you had going.

 

Reminiscent of early oingo boingo I dig!

 

I think it's good; The lines sit nicely. I think generally matching the rhythm of the vocals helps it to blend in, and it provides some counter melody. I may have done it differently, but if everyone made the same musical choices, music would be pretty boring.

 

I dig what you do with the singer. Kinda like your dancing with the vox... my opinion is that the guitar staccato and the bass staccato are a bit much together. If it were me, I would try some legato stuff with the guitar but that’s just my style. Over all I dig it and would go see your band.

 

What did the rest of your crew tell you?

 

Not a fan of that guitar sound, but your bass and the vocals sound great together.
Nice work!

 

IMHO, just a bit too busy BUT you could make it work by doubling the vocal rhythmic pattern (if not the melody) during those breaks. When it's the full band, the eighth notes work well.

All in all, Good work!

 

Well you do what you want to, there is no rules since it is your own stuff.

As for my personal opinion on the song, while it is fun I think the bass is either too busy ( the fills when you have only the drums and the singer with you ) or the tone is way too dark and should be more nasal so it would cut.

A Pbass style of tone don't work in every situation.

 

My 2 cents is that it’s less about playing too much and more about playing in the wrong places during the verses. As others have stated the bass there swims all over the vocal - would have grooved better if you played the spaces during the verses like the guitarist did - maybe playing where/what you did one time on the last verse to grab the listeners ear and give the bass a “hi mom” moment.

When you settle down in the choruses the band tightens up and the arrangement/production sounds more pro. Starting simple and varying the verses can really help build a track and draw a listener in.

I like what you play on the chorus and solo sections!

Keep recording, listening deeply and getting feedback it’s a journey!

 

The fact that you're asking makes me think that you would do it differently if you had the chance. Id really have to hear an alt take to tell you.

Its got a great 80s vibe to it. Its recorded, its good, it is what it is. Don't beat yourself up over it.

 

C'mon. It's called Psycho Disco Party. It needs a busy bass line.

 

Killin son!