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Newest Song!

Discussion in 'Recordings [BG]' started by Bassline1414, Jul 26, 2003.


  1. Yeah, time to be annoying again. I've completed yet another song for all of you to hate. This one probably transpired after listening to Faith No More (the riff is quite reminiscent of "Surpise, You're Dead"). I tried to keep it interesting with all sorts of time signature changes and such, but who knows. Your opinion would be much appreciated. Thank you!

    Steve Swyers - Dead
     
  2. Any takers? Or is it that bad? ;)
     
  3. Stephen S

    Stephen S Member

    Apr 10, 2002
    San Bernardino, CA
    I like it, it isn't really my stlye of music, but I still enjoyed listening to it.:bassist:
     
  4. Its good dude, keep up the good work :D
     
  5. BaroqueBass

    BaroqueBass

    Jul 8, 2000
    Salem, OR
    Are you looking for suggestions? If you are

    #1. You should magically infuse your drummer with the spirit of John Bonham.

    #2. The riff that starts at 2:22 is the most interesting thing about the song. If you made that your main theme then you could really take it from there and rock the block. The main theme you have now is sleepy, but 2:22 is groovy and exciting.

    #3. Get a hot female vocalist, for no other reason than hot female vocalists are hot.
     
  6. Thats really neat dude,nice quality :)

    Keep it up man.

    Good Luck!

    -Jon:oops:
     
  7. Thanks for listening, fellas.
    Baroque, I think some of your suggestions would be a little tricky.
     
  8. Fleckbass211

    Fleckbass211

    Mar 20, 2003
    My Room
    I enjoy listening to your music.




    My only thing is with the guitars. I think you would sound a lot better if it wasn't as loud and raw.
     
  9. Wrong Robot

    Wrong Robot Guest

    Apr 8, 2002
    Not my style, Kind of boring. But the playing is great, and the quality is excellent.

    I think it needs more bottom though, those guitars are really annoying, to whiny.



    And as for your first comments, Posting songs isn't annoying, and it's not "for all of us to hate" the only thing I find annoying is when you bump it more than once a day every day:p

    I don't mind if you bump your thread, just wait for it to fall to page 2 at least first :p
     
  10. christoph h.

    christoph h.

    Mar 26, 2001
    Germany
    some of the time signature changes were too "constructed". they could have been more organic. the playing is good, as wrong robot said. i wouldn't say that the guitars are annoying. you really need to add some vocals.
    i don't agree with baroquebass, i don't find the riff at 2:22 superior to the previous ones.
    but the "descending part" of the main riff i don't like. it shouldn't occur that much. perhaps once or twice, as a gimmick or break.

    also, my sentences are confusing.
    that's because it's late.
     
  11. Sorry, Robot. It shan't happen again.
    Chris, how do you feel the that the time signatures are too constructed?

    Thanks for listening, guys.
     
  12. Figjam

    Figjam

    Aug 5, 2003
    Boston, MA
    I actually liked it a lot. I think it would osund awesome if you got a singer because w.o one, things tend to sound too repetative, because you cant focus on anything else.
     
  13. i liked it, to be by itself i think it would need a singer, but as is i think it would be perfect for a professional surfing or skateboarding video:cool:
     
  14. christoph h.

    christoph h.

    Mar 26, 2001
    Germany
    hmm, strange. except for today, the new replies to this thread didn't appear in the "new since last login" list. so sorry for the late answer.

    regarding the "anorganic time/feel changes":

    it's really hard to describe. i mean the part that you might call the "chorus", starting at
    1:23 (cool chords, by the way!). i like the first two variations, but the the next one at 1:38 doesn't quite fit. It might work better with some vocals, but currently it's just too abrupt, without the listener knowing "why" the feel changes. i have a feeling that it's caused by the drums. sorry, that's all i can say.

    again, perhaps with vocals the intention of the change might become clearer, but currently i don't feel it's quite right.

    and, also, again: good work, nice chords, good playing.
     
  15. Thanks, fellas. I brought this song to my band and we're working on it right now, so hopefully there will be vocals soon. I think in a week or so I might post a new one that I finished that's more funk-based. Thanks for all the praise and/or criticism!
     
  16. DWBass

    DWBass The Funkfather

    It's pretty decent. Not my cup of tea though. I like more formulaic songwriting and sticking to 1 time signature. All those changes would drive me nuts! I hope all your band members can play it exactly. I have that problem with my band and past bands. They wanted me to bring in tunes but when I did, they wouldn't play it the way I wrote it and I demanded that they did! Never worked! I stopped submitting them. Good luck though.