Opinion of a line? Suggestions?

Discussion in 'Miscellaneous [BG]' started by Player, Dec 7, 2001.

  1. Player


    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    This tune was giving me a hard time. I didn't want to step on the guitar part (I like it) and nothing really jumped out at me. Anyway, here's the tune with what I came up with.
    http://w3.one.net/~kseub/krank/Blue Moon Over Manhattan 11-28-01.mp3
    What do you think? Any suggestions?

    p.s. Not sure how long it'll be there. They tend to not stay too long to conserve space.
  2. Player


    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    Thanks for all the input.
  3. hmmm.... [​IMG][​IMG][​IMG]

    Totally not my kind of music.. but it sounds reasonably good [​IMG]
  4. ldiezman


    Jul 11, 2001
    I think your line fits the song pretty well.. sounds good to me...:)
  5. ColonelZulu

    ColonelZulu Not Impressed By Those Who Flaunt “Authority” Supporting Member

    Apr 14, 2001
    There's something to be said for simplicity. The only place I might be tempted to add a little more melodic flash would be in between the vocal at the first build. "as night rages on..." I thing that's the words. That would be somewhere I'd feel comfortable to scale things upward a bit.

    Anyway, I agree, don't diminish from the guitar part. It's nice.

    Just my opinion. Sounds nice though
  6. Player


    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    Thanks Zulu,
    That's what i was looking for. It was really the verse (opening) that I was wrestling with. The chorus (His mind races on... etc.) I heard and really wanted to keep with that "rocking" sorta thing the drums were pushing. (Though it does open up a bit at the end and maybe there I could "embelish" a bit). Again, Thanks for the input.