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Opinion of a line? Suggestions?

Discussion in 'Miscellaneous [BG]' started by Player, Dec 7, 2001.

  1. Dec 7, 2001 #1
    Player

    Player

    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    This tune was giving me a hard time. I didn't want to step on the guitar part (I like it) and nothing really jumped out at me. Anyway, here's the tune with what I came up with.
    http://w3.one.net/~kseub/krank/Blue Moon Over Manhattan 11-28-01.mp3
    What do you think? Any suggestions?

    p.s. Not sure how long it'll be there. They tend to not stay too long to conserve space.
     
  2. Dec 10, 2001 #2
    Player

    Player

    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    Thanks for all the input.
     
  3. Dec 10, 2001 #3
    AllodoX

    AllodoX

    Jun 6, 2001
    's-Hertogenbosch, The Netherla
    hmmm.... [​IMG][​IMG][​IMG]

    Totally not my kind of music.. but it sounds reasonably good [​IMG]
     
  4. Dec 10, 2001 #4
    ldiezman

    ldiezman

    Jul 11, 2001
    Nashville
    I think your line fits the song pretty well.. sounds good to me...:)
     
  5. Dec 10, 2001 #5
    ColonelZulu

    ColonelZulu Not Impressed By Those Who Flaunt “Authority” Supporting Member

    Apr 14, 2001
    Pennsylvania
    There's something to be said for simplicity. The only place I might be tempted to add a little more melodic flash would be in between the vocal at the first build. "as night rages on..." I thing that's the words. That would be somewhere I'd feel comfortable to scale things upward a bit.

    Anyway, I agree, don't diminish from the guitar part. It's nice.

    Just my opinion. Sounds nice though
     
  6. Dec 10, 2001 #6
    Player

    Player

    Dec 27, 1999
    USA Cincinnati, OH
    Thanks Zulu,
    That's what i was looking for. It was really the verse (opening) that I was wrestling with. The chorus (His mind races on... etc.) I heard and really wanted to keep with that "rocking" sorta thing the drums were pushing. (Though it does open up a bit at the end and maybe there I could "embelish" a bit). Again, Thanks for the input.