Multitrack Bass Improv

Yeah, I feel like a jerk asking you guys to listen to my stuff, but I'd really appreciate it. http://users.wpi.edu/~ibennett/an_ode_to_all_that_is_meant_to_be_good_and_peaceful.mp3
It's a drum loop and three tracks of bass... it's a shorter song, I wrote and recorded it in about an hour, I was just wondering if I could get any of your thoughts. I enjoy constructive criticism as well. Thank you, I really do appreciate you taking your time for this.

-Ian

 

The fretted tracks I use an Ibanez EDA900 (I love that bass) and the fretless is a Warwick Corvette Std. I love the tones that I can pull out of the Ibanez with the piezos and the Warwick isn't too shabby itself haha. And thank you for listening.

 

Hmm... I guess it's funny because all of the lines are actually improvised for the recording, the only thing that i had to start off with was the percussion track haha. I listened to the track with the percussion part muted out and it definitely lacked an ending and some rhythmic propulsion. I think that was actually part of my intent with the exercise was to try and take a beat and mess around with it and try to throw something over it that you usually wouldn't expect to hear. If you want me to post a copy of it without the drum track I'd be more than happy to . Most of my written stuff in general is kind of weird, which you can listen to at http://www.myspace.com/ibennett , but just ignore the vocals haha... But really, I appreciate everyone who has listened and commented so far, it's nice to hear a different point of view on things that you're doing. I would have never thought to try and pull the drum track out. Again, thanks.