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There is no such word as critismn.

 

I think it doesn't sound good at all. The rythm of the bass seems completely unrelated to the other instruments. You should try to play less notes, and focus on being in the groove.
The sound quality isn't good either.
I hope this was constructive.

 

timing is all over the place..sorry...this is exactly what i was talking about on the speed thred..you need to slow down mate..work on your timing..its not about how many note you play, its what you dont play that matters with bass imo..

 

Sorry ,but to my ear it's all over the place , in fact so much that one can't even discern the place that it is all over.
I'd strongly recommend a re-do.
That goes for sound and playing-take your time when re doing it.
Be sure of the parts-even though it is not complicated stuff it still wants to be played well and be practiced before recording.
Don't forget to breathe whilst playing

 

where you falling down a flight of stairs while you tracked that?

 

ahhh come on man keep it positive..we are meant to help help each other here not take the piss at someones effort..from what i see there are all level players on here share the wealth

 

Don't try to go out of your way with improvisation. Work the piece out and learn it well before you put it up to be reviewed by others. I say this just because I know you can do better. If you put something forward for others to hear and provide feedback, they'll assume you gave it your best shot.

I could have nothing but words of encouragement for a fellow Indian bassist Just try to give it your best shot and put it up again!

 

also metronomes are your friend.