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Critique this please...

Pretty good. I think the bass is too hot in the mix and drums not hot enough.

My main criticism is that it seems you don't always know where you're going with a line ... you get to a point and it's "woops, where do I go from here? Better hit a root."

Plus - it's not about you most of the time. Solid and supportive, rather than explorative, is called for most of the time. You have the fundamentals to support - good time and (mostly) appropriate harmonic concepts.

My $.02.
 
Pretty good. I think the bass is too hot in the mix and drums not hot enough.

My main criticism is that it seems you don't always know where you're going with a line ... you get to a point and it's "woops, where do I go from here? Better hit a root."

Plus - it's not about you most of the time. Solid and supportive, rather than explorative, is called for most of the time. You have the fundamentals to support - good time and (mostly) appropriate harmonic concepts.

My $.02.

thanks..Yeah, I gravitate towards the root a bit.
 
Sounds great! I love it.

My advice, best use of your practice time would be working on your rhythm!

On the walking, work on not rushing the tempo of your quarter notes.

And on your soloing, I would have like to hear more "jazz style" phrasing. Longer, legato phrases of swinging 8th notes.

Out of curiosity: I'm taking an educated guess that your pianist and guitarist both have a good "ear" and they do stuff like transcribe other people's solos, when they practice. Like for example, they probably have listened to "Freddie the Freeloader" a bunch of times, and learned licks from Davis/Kelly/Adderley/Coltrane's solos. Do you think that is an accurate statement (you know them better than I), that your guitarist and pianist have this skill set?

I would suggest listening back to this very recording, select a couple tasty licks that they guitarist played, and a couple of licks by the pianist. Sit down and learn to play these same licks, on your bass. Not only will this help you build your musical vocabulary, but also the next time you jam with these musicians, you can throw some of their same musical ideas back at them. In jazz circles, this proves you are a good listener and shows respect!

High-level jazz musicians do this in real-time: They are constantly listening to the other musicians, and if they hear something they like, they react to it, in the moment.

Bottom line: I get the sense, your guitarist and pianist have simply listened to "Freddie the Freeloader" more times than you and know the song more intimately than you do. This translates into a sense of rhythmic confidence in their playing, that listeners perceive as "swing."
 
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Sounds great! I love it.

My advice, best use of your practice time would be working on your rhythm!

On the walking, work on not rushing the tempo of your quarter notes.

And on your soloing, I would have like to hear more "jazz style" phrasing. Longer, legato phrases of swinging 8th notes.

Out of curiosity: I'm taking an educated guess that your pianist and guitarist both have a good "ear" and they do stuff like transcribe other people's solos, when they practice. Like for example, they probably have listened to "Freddie the Freeloader" a bunch of times, and learned licks from Davis/Kelly/Adderley/Coltrane's solos. Do you think that is an accurate statement (you know them better than I), that your guitarist and pianist have this skill set?

I would suggest listening back to this very recording, select a couple tasty licks that they guitarist played, and a couple of licks by the pianist. Sit down and learn to play these same licks, on your bass. Not only will this help you build your musical vocabulary, but also the next time you jam with these musicians, you can throw some of their same musical ideas back at them. In jazz circles, this proves you are a good listener and shows respect!

High-level jazz musicians do this in real-time: They are constantly listening to the other musicians, and if they hear something they like, they react to it, in the moment.

Bottom line: I get the sense, your guitarist and pianist have simply listened to "Freddie the Freeloader" more times than you and know the song more intimately than you do. This translates into a sense of rhythmic confidence in their playing, that listeners perceive as "swing."


Yeah, my sense of Rythym is not as great as it should be or I want it to be. Thats largely what most of my practice time is spent on, working with a metronome. On soloing, agree also, its better than what I was able to do a year ago though.

Honestly Im not sure how much the guitar player and pianist transcribe other peoples stuff. I do know the pianist is deep into the Levine theory book but Im not sure how much transcribing he does. I don't know much about the guitar player, only played with him once or twice since last march and this recording was the first time since October we were together.

Thanks...this was good critical feedback for me! (and sigh, the struggle continues)>
 
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Well, first of all I would be pretty firm with the rest of the cats about solo order. You know, guitar gets first solo, then piano, then me, then let's trade 4s - or something like that. My main issue is that it doesn't sound like anyone is listening to each other, everybody's kind of in their own little world. I know everybody's a beginner and we all have to start somewhere, but playing together is the goal. Like Jim Hall said, when someone asked him to define the swing feel, he answered "Camaraderie!"
One of the things that I really worked on with Joe was trying to play lines that were ONLY quarter notes, center of the beat, no anticipations, slides, ghost notes, triplets, etc. JUST quarter notes. If you can get together with your drummer before the session (or hang afterward), play through a couple of tunes - you walk JUST quarters and s/he plays JUST quarter notes on the ride cymbal. Try to get so that the attack of your note and the attack of the bead of the drumstick on the ride are indistinguishable. That you are making the cymbal sound and s/he is making the bass sound. And then anytime that you are playing with the group and it feels like things are not jelling time wise or feel wise - get back to that synced in feeling of the ride and the bass note. Let note choice go, if you have to, in order to make the rhythm solid.

I do have to disagree with a few things Mushroo said.
1. "...you can throw some of their same musical ideas back at them. In jazz circles, this proves you are a good listener and shows respect!" Just. Say. No. Nothing interrupts a conversation faster than someone repeating back something you just said, just as you are saying it. It's NOT supportive, it's NOT interactive. And, to me, it's a sure sign of amateurism, not experience.
2. "...more "jazz style" phrasing. Longer, legato phrases of swinging 8th notes." You want to PLAY, not SOUND LIKE you can play. All you need to concern yourself with is shutting out that little voice on your shoulder telling you what you should play, and judging what you are playing, and just strive to hear the arc of notes that are your response to your aural environment. Particularly when you solo; Joe's advice to me was to NOT PLAY ANYTHING until you just couldn't stand to NOT BE PLAYINg, and then the next thing to come out of your instrument will be closer to what you are really hearing in the moment. It is something that is hard and most lesser experienced musicians have a hard time just taking their hand off the instrument. They have to PLAY ALL THE TIME or something terrible will happen and the music will stop (which is one of the reasons the piano player jumped in when you left a breath in a phrase at the beginning of your solo when you quoted the melody) so there is this constant barrage of notes to fill any and every space. But it's mostly gibberish, and you DON'T want to speak gibberish. Everybody in the band needs to understand that rests are notes, too. And that melody, accompaniment, and solo incorporate RESTS AS NOTES in order to provide structure and form to the music.

Can you give me a little idea as to what these session are? Friends getting together, cold call sessions with different folks showing up at different times, structured workshop type sessions with personnel who don't really know each other outside the "class"? One of the great things about the group of folks I played sessions with there was that any of us could wave something off in the middle of the tune, off something wasn't happening - someone wasn't hearing a change, if the time got funny, if they needed to work something out, etc. SO it wasn't just start the tune and hope for the best, everyone was more interested in getting some music going , not just getting through a tune. That's easy to do without a lot of discussion if everyone knows (and actually likes) each other. It may be harder in a more "formal" setting, but I have found that, if you ask with the explanation that it's for you to try to work some things out and make a better personal contribution to the music, most folks are amenable. I'm not saying do it in every tune, but I think if it happens with at least one tune every session, that "permission" will be asked by other members of the group AND the ensemble playing will improve...
 
To clarify, I meant when it is your turn to solo! Like if you are "trading 4's" with someone, it can be like a musical conversation where you listen to each other and bounce ideas back and forth. Or you might begin your solo, by quoting a phrase from the previous soloist, so your two solos kind of "connect." It's a way of showing respect to your peers and communicating, "I heard what you did there, and I like your musical ideas!"

I didn't mean you should interrupt someone else's solo! I agree that would be amateurish.
That kind of doesn’t jell with the “learn the licks they did” statement. Playing something that somebody else played last week doesn’t have anything to do with what we’re playing this week, right?
 
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If you can get together with your drummer before the session (or hang afterward), play through a couple of tunes - you walk JUST quarters and s/he plays JUST quarter notes on the ride cymbal. Try to get so that the attack of your note and the attack of the bead of the drumstick on the ride are indistinguishable. That you are making the cymbal sound and s/he is making the bass sound.

Putting together recordings one track at a time doesn't lend itself to swing ... but this is SO RIGHT. It's the simplest thing, but far from easy for most, especially if you didn't grow up with swing.
 
The piano and guitar are on top of each other too. It is tough on both guitar players and pianists to play jazz together for this reason, but have them listen to these recordings of the 4 of you and start thinking about how to adjust their comping to stay off of one other.

Maybe suggest them listening to some early Oscar Peterson Trio recordings with Herb Ellis and specifically how they co-existed so beautifully.
 
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Can you give me a little idea as to what these session are? Friends getting together, cold call sessions with different folks showing up at different times, structured workshop type sessions with personnel who don't really know each other outside the "class"? One of the great things about the group of folks I played sessions with there was that any of us could wave something off in the middle of the tune, off something wasn't happening - someone wasn't hearing a change, if the time got funny, if they needed to work something out, etc. SO it wasn't just start the tune and hope for the best, everyone was more interested in getting some music going , not just getting through a tune. That's easy to do without a lot of discussion if everyone knows (and actually likes) each other. It may be harder in a more "formal" setting, but I have found that, if you ask with the explanation that it's for you to try to work some things out and make a better personal contribution to the music, most folks are amenable. I'm not saying do it in every tune, but I think if it happens with at least one tune every session, that "permission" will be asked by other members of the group AND the ensemble playing will improve...


thanks for all the replies. Been working a lot the past few weeks so its taken some time for me to circle back to this.

In response to Ed, the drummer and piano play and myself know each other from the Grateful Dead jam band circle in my area. The guitar player we found somewhere, maybe craigslist. Its a core group that gets together on average once a month in person and we just started using jamkazzam to get some time in playing together otherwise.

By, "waving something off", Im not sure what you mean. Im guessing stopping and starting over if something didn't feel right?
 
thanks for all the replies. Been working a lot the past few weeks so its taken some time for me to circle back to this.

In response to Ed, the drummer and piano play and myself know each other from the Grateful Dead jam band circle in my area. The guitar player we found somewhere, maybe craigslist. Its a core group that gets together on average once a month in person and we just started using jamkazzam to get some time in playing together otherwise.

By, "waving something off", Im not sure what you mean. Im guessing stopping and starting over if something didn't feel right?
Yeah, stopping the proceedings. Sorry, sometimes I speak in code without knowing I'm doing it...
 
Looking for feedback.

20210228-freddie-freeloader

Been working on becoming better at walking and soloing, feel like I am making some progress.

3:07 was where I intended to solo but I think there was a miscommunication between the KB player and myself and I started there and stopped.
Ok
Notes' choice are ok but the time and feel are in the left field.

This is the hardest part of walking especially on electric because you don't have the bounce of the longer strings and the resonance of the body. On electric you have to keep this in mind. You don't have the natural bounce of the sound of the acoustic bass. Try to emulate as much as possible the sound of the upright by playing near the neck and play with ride. Tap your foot on 2&4 !!! This will improve your time feel a lot.

Good luck and try posting another version with these tips :)
 
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Notes' choice are ok but the time and feel are in the left field.

This is the hardest part of walking especially on electric because you don't have the bounce of the longer strings and the resonance of the body. On electric you have to keep this in mind. You don't have the natural bounce of the sound of the acoustic bass. Try to emulate as much as possible the sound of the upright by playing near the neck and play with ride. Tap your foot on 2&4 !!! This will improve your time feel a lot.

Good luck and try posting another version with these tips :)


thanks, appreciate the honesty. we aren't getting together again for another couple of weeks I don't think but if anything post worthy comes of that I'll post more.

It's been a challenging process to try and re-format my playing coming from a background thats basically rock and jam band with a sprinkling of jazz thrown in from time to time. Double bass studies with Joe has helped me improve but it's such a slow process for me at times it gets frustrating.
 
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thanks, appreciate the honesty. we aren't getting together again for another couple of weeks I don't think but if anything post worthy comes of that I'll post more.

It's been a challenging process to try and re-format my playing coming from a background thats basically rock and jam band with a sprinkling of jazz thrown in from time to time. Double bass studies with Joe has helped me improve but it's such a slow process for me at times it gets frustrating.
I still remember the day where it just happened to me. During my practice of reading big band charts, I felt the swing in my ghost notes and boum I was swinging better than ever. So keep working at it and that lightbulb moment will happen :-)
 
Looking for feedback.

20210228-freddie-freeloader

Been working on becoming better at walking and soloing, feel like I am making some progress.

3:07 was where I intended to solo but I think there was a miscommunication between the KB player and myself and I started there and stopped.

Sounds good in general. The groove suffered a little bit from time to time from lack of consistency and forward motion of your quarter notes but not on the whole track. It's just that the interaction between your walking and the high hat got a little tense from time to time.

As for the keys solo mixup, you should had just backed right off the second he started playing lines, but sounds like you know that already. I can ear the awkwardness of the keys starting to solo but you still trying to play lines for a few bars. I almost always back off when this happens since the bass dropping out kills the groove.

For your solo later in the track, work on the rhythm of your lines. They sound flighty and out of time, which is actually pretty common for jazz bassists trying to solo and something we all need to work on to overcome. Christian McBride is someone whose lines are always confident and in time. They hit you right in the face.
 
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Sounds great! I love it.

My advice, best use of your practice time would be working on your rhythm!

On the walking, work on not rushing the tempo of your quarter notes.

I enjoyed hearing your playing and applaud you for asking for feedback.

You are certainly farther down the path than I as a player, but the two things I heard that might be helpful, though they've already been mentioned, are not rushing your time, and perhaps working toward connecting your lines so they flow more...it sounds to me sometimes like the tones are applicable (root and chord tones), but they jump around more than flow one into the other. I think someone mentioned it as sounding sometimes like you are not sure where you are going.

I relate...it's frustrating for me to be trying to play a simply blues shuffle, which seems so simple, but I hear myself here and there anticipating the beat too quickly. That's my priority right now for myself...just simple time, and coordinating my fingers.
 
Tap your foot on 2&4 !!! This will improve your time feel a lot.

I can't agree with this advice. I think that tapping upbeats will actually hamper your swing, corrupting the evenness of four equal beats.

The popular music of the last 70 years has conditioned us to think that swing must have a snare drum on 2 and 4. It doesn't. If you listen to the swing bands of the 1930s and 1940s, you will hear that the drummer often doesn't touch the snare drum except for accents and to take the song out with a peppier chorus.