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Demo - query

Work on this song more, or kick it to the curb.

  • Ditch

    Votes: 1 20.0%
  • Keep

    Votes: 4 80.0%
  • Carrots

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • Total voters
    5
I like it, but for a standalone track (as in its not on an album, merging two songs or something along those lines), I feel like it never built up to anything. It was just a loop with cool lyrics over it. I feel like if at some point at the end, you had slammed on one of the dozens of fuzz boxes you own, it would have tossed in an element of surprise and climax, know what I mean?

But that aside, I do really like the track. Very chill, but as a stand alone track that doesn't always work. If that was on an album between two more upbeat songs I wouldn't have anything to complain about. I vote keep, but if I had my way in the world, with a hint of revision.
 
I like it, but for a standalone track (as in its not on an album, merging two songs or something along those lines), I feel like it never built up to anything. It was just a loop with cool lyrics over it. I feel like if at some point at the end, you had slammed on one of the dozens of fuzz boxes you own, it would have tossed in an element of surprise and climax, know what I mean?

But that aside, I do really like the track. Very chill, but as a stand alone track that doesn't always work. If that was on an album between two more upbeat songs I wouldn't have anything to complain about. I vote keep, but if I had my way in the world, with a hint of revision.

Quality feedback thanks, it is just stand alone song... because well, I'm just kinda writing songs here for my own health and mental well being.

I took your fuzz idea (pink flesh into superfuzz) and added some sonic mayhem into the end of the song. Link Removed (I've not replaced the whole thing yet).
 
Quality feedback thanks, it is just stand alone song... because well, I'm just kinda writing songs here for my own health and mental well being.

I took your fuzz idea (pink flesh into superfuzz) and added some sonic mayhem into the end of the song. Link Removed (I've not replaced the whole thing yet).

I dig it. A lot. Mayhem is defiantly the word for it, and its a word I happen to love...

Thumbs up, if you decide to keep messing with it, make sure to post the final results.