First attempted recording and would like comments

[Red Lobsta]

Hey guys, so i wrote this song yesterday while i was sitting by the window waiting for UPS to deliver me a bass and decided to record today. This is my first time recording and sharing my music with other people, and would like some feedback of some sort. I'm not sure where i'm going with this song yet, all i know is i like what i have so far.

P.s there is little bits of mistakes here and there and I ultimately plan on fixing

YouTube - Jaguar Trance

 

[deaf pea]

Hey guys, so i wrote this song yesterday while i was sitting by the window waiting for UPS to deliver me a bass and decided to record today. This is my first time recording and sharing my music with other people, and would like some feedback of some sort. I'm not sure where i'm going with this song yet, all i know is i like what i have so far.

P.s there is little bits of mistakes here and there and I ultimately plan on fixing

The first thing you need to do is tune-up EVERY instrument just before you record it . . . . . .

 

[bassobrutto]

Tuning aside, I would say this a promising first effort. You have a nice sense of melody and counterpoint. It's simple but quite effective. If you want to develop it, I would suggest either adding a vocal or throwing in a slightly more complex, more musically surprising instrumental passage for variety.

 

[ric3xrt]

Tuning aside, I would say this a promising first effort. You have a nice sense of melody and counterpoint. It's simple but quite effective. If you want to develop it, I would suggest either adding a vocal or throwing in a slightly more complex, more musically surprising instrumental passage for variety.

+1
Good melody msmooth piece.