Oh, that's you? I listened to your clip a few times yesterday.
* Nice lines nice overall sound/tone and some use of space
* Nice job quoting the melody - something most other people don't bother to do.
Good job - I enjoyed it.
I thought about posting my own clip but still working through want I want to get across:
1) Soloing an entire chorus focusing on just one or two ideas. I listened to your clip and can hear at least 5 distinct (and good) ideas. You don't really follow up on any of them after fiddling with them for a little bit. I struggle with this as well.
2) Creating an arc over the entire solo. Intro->body->climax->resolution using the entire 32 bars. At some point I like to be able to clearly define the climax of the solo. At least do something that contrasts from the rest of it.
I listened to alot of clips people posted. Lotsa notes, not much use of space, and not much use of dynamics. I usually never finish listening to any of them. After a while they all start to the same very similar, with some exceptions. That group is a good way to find out what others are doing so you don't end up sounding like them.