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My work Dark & Light
- Thread starter CelloBass
- Start date
- Apr 1, 2000
- 17,409
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- Endorsing Artist: Roscoe Guitars, DR Strings, Aguilar Amplification
I listened to "Visioni". Good piece, lots of space and a nice feel. I couldn't help but think that a fretless bass would have fit the texture better.... but that's just me. Nice work.
it's nice, but i found that the pieces sound very much alike with regards to instrumention, style and arrangement. that's not necessarily a bad thing, just not my taste.
i also missed some percussion from time to time.
still, it's really great that you had the creativity and energy to put out a consistent work like this...
i also missed some percussion from time to time.
still, it's really great that you had the creativity and energy to put out a consistent work like this...
Thank you for your comment BassChuck and christoph h.
@ BassChuck: in the next works i'll use a fretless bass in some tracks!
@ BassChuck: in the next works i'll use a fretless bass in some tracks!
Great, and I agree that a fretless might sound good on some of your songs, although a large part of the sound seems to be the fretted bass.
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!
Warning! Constructive criticism alert!
I know what you were trying to accomplish ambiance-wise with all the pauses between individual part between the songs. That works if you use it sparingly, but doing it three or four times within each song just ends up making it sound like you wrote a bunch of unrelated parts and couldn't figure out how to combine them.
For as prominent as the bass is in all those songs, its kind of boring. I'll try to explain this so it makes some kind of sense. Double tapping is alright, but what you are playing (for the most part) don't sound like lines where you need to use it because the speed or range dictate it. There are also no embellishments anywhere to spice the bass lines up. Adding little things here and there to personalize the playing, break up the monotony and make it sound more musical would have helped a lot.
If you're going to use tapping like you do, (providing melodic lines rather than flash) you should try working on developing two distinct melodic/ harmonic ideas that coexist within the line--or at least make your right and left hands sound like they are working independent of each other.
La Fenice had some good groves about 1/2 way through, but again you didn't build off of them. Just kinda threw them out there and let them die before moving on to something else. Don't be afraid to use and return to a melodic idea when constructing a song's arrangement. While it may not seem necessary to you to do this in order to convey whatever message you want your music too, it will generally sound much more logical for the audience than if you go from part "A" to "B" to "C" to "D" without ever returning to something that provides a framework for the song.
Take my criticism for what its worth. Its only personal opinion. I hope it didn't come off too harsh...I really didn't think its bad music, just that it could've been better--but most everything can.
I know what you were trying to accomplish ambiance-wise with all the pauses between individual part between the songs. That works if you use it sparingly, but doing it three or four times within each song just ends up making it sound like you wrote a bunch of unrelated parts and couldn't figure out how to combine them.
For as prominent as the bass is in all those songs, its kind of boring. I'll try to explain this so it makes some kind of sense. Double tapping is alright, but what you are playing (for the most part) don't sound like lines where you need to use it because the speed or range dictate it. There are also no embellishments anywhere to spice the bass lines up. Adding little things here and there to personalize the playing, break up the monotony and make it sound more musical would have helped a lot.
If you're going to use tapping like you do, (providing melodic lines rather than flash) you should try working on developing two distinct melodic/ harmonic ideas that coexist within the line--or at least make your right and left hands sound like they are working independent of each other.
La Fenice had some good groves about 1/2 way through, but again you didn't build off of them. Just kinda threw them out there and let them die before moving on to something else. Don't be afraid to use and return to a melodic idea when constructing a song's arrangement. While it may not seem necessary to you to do this in order to convey whatever message you want your music too, it will generally sound much more logical for the audience than if you go from part "A" to "B" to "C" to "D" without ever returning to something that provides a framework for the song.
Take my criticism for what its worth. Its only personal opinion. I hope it didn't come off too harsh...I really didn't think its bad music, just that it could've been better--but most everything can.
Hi MyUsernameHere, thank you very much for your critic!
I think the same about to use and return to the same part and with the new songs i'll remember it!
I think the same about to use and return to the same part and with the new songs i'll remember it!
exactly, crying out for some singing fretless lines
nice use of space in composition, arrangement and mixing
very solid all around
i really liked how it just flowed really nicely and is mellow and uplifting some things to improve on maybe incorporate some percussion like someone else suggested.
would you mind listening to my work? i havent really had alot of time to work on the songs but tell me what you think
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btw nice piano playing too, i wanna get that good
how many years have u been playing it?
some things to improve on maybe incorporate some percussion like someone else suggested.would you mind listening to my work? i havent really had alot of time to work on the songs but tell me what you think
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btw nice piano playing too, i wanna get that good
how many years have u been playing it?
