If you wouldn't mind my comments, some very positive and a few less so, here they are:
1. You've got some great chops, so good on that.
2. Your left hand is fast, and your right hand is light on the highly-tensioned part of the string between the PU cover and the bridge, so again, good on that.
3. You get a very solo bass tone from that, and it works very well in the context of the viddy you posted.
4. Here are my criticisms, and they stem more from my personal preferences than from any fault in what you're doing:
- your vibrato, while consistently-applied, is somewhat "manic." I realize that you are doing fast runs in many cases, so there isn't much time to slip in a long slow vibrato, but consider a vibrato that is half-time to the one you are doing now.
- your phrases are nice, but they are just that: phrases, not a coherent message. Consider stringing together lines such as you are using with not just silence/rests in between them, but some slow downs and speed-ups when coming in and out of a phrase. I understand that rests are important, but it comes across unnaturally like an argument separated by periods of silence, as opposed to a conversation that has an ebb and flow.
So, don't take this personally; I've been playing bass professionally and semi-professionally since 1980 (including six years on upright in the Boston area jazz scene), and your chops are great; better than mine. But consider the feel. It was missing for me.
