Opinions on a short instrumental composition?

[Kenzy]

EDIT: The second draft is complete, and here it is! I'll leave the first draft available for a short period of time for comparison.

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I've a short instrumental composition here, and I'm thinking to put it through a second draft, so I'm curious as to what TB thinks would make this track a more enjoyable listening experience. It should be very apparent that the instrument sounds are rendered electronically- I merely exported the score as a MIDI into Reason and bounced it through some instrument patches.

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Thanks in advance.

 

[Kenzy]

I've completed my first revision and the 2nd draft is now available. A third draft will be made, so there's still the opportunity to get opinions on it still.

 

[Kenzy]

Wow, that's an intriguing way to go about it, nice work, Kenzy!

read: Bump.

 

[chaosMK]

I couldn't really get too far into it. Are you asking for feedback on the composition itself or the production?

 

[Kenzy]

I couldn't really get too far into it. Are you asking for feedback on the composition itself or the production?

The composition itself. I won't be seriously handling the production until I've gotten the composition exactly where I want it. Probably at least one more draft.