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Yet another 'critique my playing' thread!

Discussion in 'General Instruction [BG]' started by LagBox, Mar 18, 2014.

  1. LagBox


    Mar 3, 2013
    Hey talkbass! I've been playing around a year, and I wanted to know what some of you more (or less) seasoned players think I can improve on.

    It's an overdub of Smooth Operator, originally played by Paul Denman.

    There's a big flub towards the end, pretend you don't hear it. :bag:
    Last edited by a moderator: Apr 16, 2014
  2. Sounds like you got the song down note-for-note. You have a good tone.

    The two things that I do notice:
    1. Timing - sometimes it seems like you're concentrating a bit too much on getting the right note, thus losing the timing. More importantly, it lacks groove. It has a clinical sound, for lack of a better expression. The original bassline has a bit of swing to it, notes flow into each other, syncing with the bass drum <-- that's key.

    2. Expression - A lot of the trills and bass-slides are emphasized a bit too much and become distracting than enhancing. Just be wary of the dynamics when plucking the strings.

    So, basically just try to sync more with the bass drum and you're good to go.
  3. LagBox


    Mar 3, 2013
    That's the kind of thing I was hearing too. I'll try to listen to the drums more, and hopefully improve the feel. I assume this is one of the aspects of one's playing that improves with time.

    EDIT: thanks for the help, by the way!
  4. joelns


    Mar 10, 2014
    It will help a lot to play with a live drummer, not to mention other musicians.
  5. LagBox


    Mar 3, 2013
    I've been doing this some recently, and it's proving to be a good learning tool.