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is my song any good? :)

Discussion in 'Ask Janek Gwizdala' started by chiocchi12, Nov 19, 2012.

  1. chiocchi12


    Nov 19, 2012
  2. bassinplace


    Dec 1, 2008
    I enjoyed it! Lyrics not necessarily my cup of tea, but good song!
  3. brad houser

    brad houser

    Jan 4, 2008
    wrong question to ask. the question I would suggest would be : does it sound good to you?
  4. AuBassMan

    AuBassMan Supporting Member

    Oct 17, 2011
    Central Virginia
    Endorsing: REMIC Microphones
    I like it!!!
  5. worxforme

    worxforme Self Actualized Bad Speller

    Dec 10, 2009
    LAnsing MI
    Sounds great, if it were me I'd edit/shorten it a bit, but what do I know?

    Great Job!
  6. Snarf


    Jan 23, 2005
    New York, NY
    You're pretty consistently sharp. Arrangement is flat, no development, no dynamics.

    Sorry to be the negative dude. :( There's potential but you need a producer.
  7. phox


    Sep 17, 2011
    The music itself is very repetitive, there's some changes and dynamics in the vocals, but like Snarf said there's no development.
  8. jaxom


    Aug 31, 2008
    New Castle, PA
    I think with a nice upbeat drum track and a tight bass it would really kick...
  9. 5StringFool

    5StringFool Supporting Member

    Jun 10, 2011
    Greenup, KY
    All in all I think it's a good tune, but I would do some things differently. To me it seems a little long and lacking in dynamics (as some others have mentioned), but I think it has a good melody and I liked the vocals.

    Changes I would make... bring in drums @ around 1:10, cut the 3rd chorus before the "leaves on the trees" section, shorten the "leaves on the trees" section a little and bring in an electric riffing under the vocal, and then keep it big until the fade out at the end. Essentially making it build the entire way through the song.

    Just my .02... take it for what it is. ;)