The Haiku Thread

[JimK]

Once upon a time TV Land was running a Leave It To Beaver marathon...and used this promo-

Leave it to Beaver
And you'll be disappointed.
Boy's dumb as a stump.

 

[Benjamin Strange]

Hungry in church
Ate all the communion bread
MMM! Sacrilegious!

 

[fourstringdrums]

Hungry in church
Ate all the communion bread
MMM! Sacrilegious!

As a catholic
I was raised to take offense
Could not help but laugh

 

[Benjamin Strange]

My slippers await
Bunny fur enfolds my foot
Beastiality?

 

[mongo2]

Darkness all around
Flying through the darkest night
To eat a dead bird.

 

[Jay2U]

Thread is running well
Youtubifying myself
Fall is still boring

 

[Jay2U]

Weather here is bad
Jogging outside makes me wet
Sitting makes me fat

 

[BassyBill]

Resurrected threads
Sometimes remind me of things
I was pleased to post

 

[fdeck]

nothing spoils a good
Haiku like having just one
Too many syllables

 

[mongo2]

Black Friday is here
Stand in lines for all the stuff
You don't really need.

 

[Musiclogic]

Haiku of Japan
Tedium out of boredom
Noodles in broth rock

 

[BassyBill]

nothing spoils a good
Haiku like having just one
Too many syllables

It's possibly even worse when the same category of error is made with the Limerick form:

There was a young man from Japan
Whe wrote poems that didn't quite scan
When asked to say why
He would give this reply
"It's because I always like to try and cram as many words into the last line as I possibly can."

 

[Scott1]

Hungry in church
Ate all the communion bread
MMM! Sacrilegious!

Lol

The last line would be better : MMM! Sacrilicious!

 

[mongo2]

Lol

The last line would be better : MMM! Sacrilicious!

Look, a critic shows
How he'd rather have it done
Yet Haiku not used

 

[fdeck]

Look, a critic shows
How he'd rather have it done
Yet Haiku not used

Is a syllable?
Emoticons in haiku
Complicate matters.

 

[mongo2]

Is a syllable?
Emoticons in haiku
Complicate matters.

No, but I removed
the emoticon to not
confuse weakminded

 

[BassyBill]

No, but I removed
the emoticon to not
confuse weakminded

justifiable
intelligibility
recomposition

 

[BassyBill]

justifiable
intelligibility
recomposition

Quite good, or real bad?
Whatever you think of it
It's killed off the thread.

 

[slobake]

Cold morning grey
Rising from the dead
An old thread

 

[elgecko]

It doesn't rain here
It supposed to be sunny
all year...it's SoCal!