This is basically correct, and probably the most plausible and useful way of notating that part, IMO anyway. It probably doesn't need to get any more complicated than this. It's certainly not in any sense wrong to notate short rests between short notes, but in practice, it's often unnecessary and can make a score look fussy. You can often get the desired effect by other means (eg, dots on notes), or players can supply the required feel on their own.Here’s one that actually looks correct - including the tempo. From top-dots.com…
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