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LYRICS! DROP EM HERE!

#61
Well I haven't been back here in a while, and I just wrote a song for my band to play at our next show (provided we learn it quickly) and I figured I would give you guys a sneak peek. The rhythm's a little weird, but it fits my band pretty well

ENTRANCED

Your hair's jet black
Your eyes are brown
And I can't even think
When you're around
Your kisses paralyze
Your touch makes me melt
I think I'm falling
I think I have fell

In love with you
So entranced by you
You put a spell on me
Now you're all I can see

Alone here I stand
Surrounded by ghosts
You are my angel
The only one who knows
I'm just a human
I'm just a man
And I'm crazy
Going crazy

In love with you
So entranced by you
Crazy for you
Everything I do
It's all for you
 
#62
Not bad! We haven't had a love song on here since the thread's birth. I'm especially impressed that you made a love song with all the hallmarks (which usually make a love song sound completely cliche) but that actually seemed to have some thought put into it. I enjoyed it. Good luck.
 
#63
Thanks! It's one of the few songs I wrote that I'm actually very happy with, and I wrote it while half asleep at 3AM talking to the girl that it's about. I was out of it, but it turned out pretty good... now I just need to come up with a solid chord progression for it.
 
#64
SMILEYSIXX said:
Thanks! It's one of the few songs I wrote that I'm actually very happy with, and I wrote it while half asleep at 3AM talking to the girl that it's about. I was out of it, but it turned out pretty good... now I just need to come up with a solid chord progression for it.
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3AM huh? Welcome to the club. We've got jackets and free food on wednsdays. But yeah. I wish I could know what that kind of thing is even like. I haven't had a girlfriend in forever. unless you count the girl that "dated" me (over phone ask, over phone breakup) for a week...:rollno: It sucks....
 
#65
I just wrote half a song, I still need a chorus, another verse and a title...

One look in your eyes,
See the pain,
See the lies.

One touch of your skin,
Feel the fire,
Feel the sin.

One taste of your lips,
Taste the love,
She’s got you in her grip!


I will walk my road alone,
No heart to call my own,
As I drift on the wind.

I face my fears myself,
No trace of love’s wealth,
Forgive me, you have sinned.

I live my life in pain,
Search for the truth in vain,
Seeking, but never finding.

I retrace my past in hope,
Back to the hangman’s rope,
Round my neck you’re winding.
 
#69
OPBASSMAN1994 said:
Kind of an anti romance song or a "Wow this girl is killing me but I love her" kind of deal, huh? Not shabby.
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Yeah, it's kinda based around what I went thorugh a little while ago, but taken to the extreme. Ie: this guy lost his love 'cus she was a little beeotch who threw it all back in his face, and that has now reduced his life to wondering what the hell happened to him
 
#72
SLOW DEATH (with a paycheque) © 1993
Written in a boozy 3/4 time by moi. :p

VERSE 1:
When you work, for someone else.
You're not paid, to think yourself.
Repetition's grind just eats at your day...
Though you work, a job for years.
What you learn, will earn no cheers.
From a boss who says:
“Nice, but do it.., this way...”

CHORUS A:
In the time, I have worked.
For that small-minded jerk.
You would have thought I earned my fair share of say...
My ideas, I have found.
Get beaten into the ground.
By a response that says:
“That's not why you're paid.”

VERSE 2:
The boredom, the frustration.
The thin paycheque, that I am making.
Oh I know I will die here one day...
With the shifts, that I am working.
The rare time off, is just a token.
No matter where I go I never can get away...

CHORUS B:
In the time, I have worked.
For that small-minded jerk.
You would have thought I earned my fair share of say...
But my ideas, I have found.
Get beaten into the ground.
By a response that says:
“That's not why you're paid!”

VERSE 3:
Well times turned, for the worse.
This working man, found out first.
When a notice came with my hourly pay.
(Spoken) “Your job, you're doing fine.
But to fatten, our bottom line.
(Sung) Your position will be redundant in May...”

CHORUS C:
With all the time, I have worked.
For that small-minded jerk!
You would have thought I earned my fair share of say..
Though I worked that job for years.
What I learned earned no cheers.
From a boss who said
“Too bad! But things 'happen' that way.”

VERSE 4:
(Then I recalled...)
The boredom, the frustration.
The thin paycheque, I was making.
Oh I thought I would die there one day.
With the shifts, that I was working.
The rare time off, was just a token.
No matter where I'd go I never could get away.

VERSE 5:
Cause it was just a...
slow death!
With a paycheque.
Something I didn't need anyway....
Though my job, is long gone
I will sing a new song
And they'll hear me sing my song soon some day.
'Cause it sure beats a...
slow death!
With a Paycheque......

End.
 
#75
Here it is, the whole shebang! :smug:

Mother of Pain

One look in your eyes,
See the pain,
See the lies.

One touch of your skin,
Feel the fire,
Feel the sin.

One taste of your lips,
Taste the love,
You have me in your grip!


I will walk my road alone,
No heart to call my own,
As I drift on the wind.

I face my fears myself,
No trace of love’s wealth,
Forgive me, you have sinned.

I live my life in pain,
Search for the truth in vain,
Seeking, but never finding.

I retrace my past in hope,
Back to the hangman’s rope,
Round my neck you’re winding.


(chorus)
Mother of pain,
Will I ever love again?
Queen of my heart,
Tearing me apart.
Mistress of lies,
Killed before I’d died,
Angel from Hell,
Pray I’m safe and well.


I see the sun set at night,
Feel the wind and its might,
Wish to fly away from here.

I grow weak, lame and old,
My heart forever cold,
Death’s reach, drawing near.

I see you in my dreams,
Wake in a fit of screams,
Memory, my only escape.

I have nothing left here now,
But the sweat upon my brow,
Tomorrow, I will not wake.



(chorus x2)

(chorus alt.)
Mother of pain,
Will I ever live again?
Queen of my heart,
Take me to the start.
Mistress of lies,
Never heard my cries,
Angel from Hell,
Hope I’m safe and well.


I have left this Earth,
Because of you,
Waiting on the other side,
Ready to pull you through…
 
#79
I'm currently working on a side story to 2112. Guy is killed by the priests for spreading free thought. Meets the elder race. Leads them in assuming control. So far, I'm up to him making contact with the land of the elders:

2112 – The Reassumption
Here I stand before you now,
I won’t give in, I will not bow,
To you who rid me of my mind.

I broadcast with my own two hands,
From mountain top to desert sands,
We must let the people know.

This price is one that’s worth paying,
To let them hear just what I’m saying,
I will become a martyr for our cause.

So take me now, do what you will,
This message is one you cannot kill,
We will assume control.

Now take me,
And break me,
Do what you will.

So kill me,
Until we,
Meet once again,
I leave you with these words,

Fear me,
Hear me,
We shall return…

I am drifting on the astral plain,
Alone and empty, half insane.
I have no form, I cannot feel,
I have lost control of what is real.

A blinding light shines before me,
A beacon of hope for all to see.
As I move towards this brazen miracle,
I am greeted by an elder oracle.
 

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